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Anyone who thinks it's easy to write a screenplay has never
tried it. It is one of the most deceptively difficult forms
to master. Having come this far is a major accomplishment. Congratulations!
But now, let's take it one step further. I am completely committed
to helping you make absolutely sure the story you set out to
tell is not only on the page, but realized there in its most
enthralling, compelling and irresistible form.
HERE'S WHAT YOU GET:
A comprehensive overview of your script (or novel), first pointing
out all its strengths, then zeroing in on the areas that need
work. But don't worry, I will never point out a problem without
offering not only several specific solutions, but also guidelines
to help you craft your own solution, and avoid making the same
mistake in the future.
But what good is an overview, unless you know exactly where
each these problems are manifest, and how to remedy them in
each specific instance? Because there is nothing more frustrating
than knowing the problem exists, but being unsure exactly where,
I will then provide a comprehensive page by page analysis, focusing
on such things as:
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PLOT AND PREMISE: |
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Is the premise believable? |
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Is it fresh? |
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Does it have an internal logic that
holds it together? |
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Are there credibility gaps? |
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IS IT VISUAL? |
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The first rule of storytelling is show
don't tell - and this is just as true for novels as for
screenplays! |
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Does the story unfold visually? |
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Are the characters telling us what
is going on, or are we seeing it for ourselves? |
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THE CHARACTERS: |
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Are they believable? |
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Are they accessible? |
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Are they unique? |
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Can we feel what they are feeling?
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Do we know enough about them to care? |
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What does each character want? |
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What are they willing/forced to risk
in order to achieve their goal? |
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Is each change the character goes through
earned? |
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THE FORCE OF OPPOSITION: |
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Is your villain focused enough? |
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Is your villain strong enough? |
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Does he/she/it really put your hero
to the test? |
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STRUCTURE AND PACING: |
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Does each scene drive the story forward?
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Does each scene arc? |
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Is there dramatic tension? Does it
build? |
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Does each setup have a payoff? |
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DIALOGUE: |
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Is the dialogue crisp? |
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Does each character have a distinct
voice? |
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Does the dialogue resonate emotionally? |
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Is the dialogue brief? |
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Are there memorable lines that actors
will want to be remembered for? |
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MARKETABILITY: |
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How salable is it in today's market? |
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Is it so high budget that only a major
studio could produce? |
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Can it be summed up in a logline? |
PACKAGES AND RATES:
| The Complete Screenplay
Package: $950.00 |
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15-25 single spaced pages of in-depth
notes, including a detailed overview and an extensive
page by page analysis. |
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A one hour phone consultation (or two
half hours). |
| Manuscript Evaluation and
Notes: $5.00 per page* |
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20-35 single spaced pages of in-depth notes, including an overview of the novel’s strengths and trouble
spots, followed by an extensive chapter by chapter analysis.
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A one hour phone consultation (or two half hours).
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* with a 150 page minimum. |
| Story/Development Conference: $85.00
per hour |
Turn around time is two to three weeks.
SUBMISSION PROCEDURES:
| Snail Mail |
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Please send the script or manuscript,
along with a check or money order made payable to Lisa
Cron for the full amount of the service selected. |
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Lisa Cron
Inside Story Ink
2118 Wilshire Blvd, Suite #619
Santa Monica, CA 90403
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| Electronic: |
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Scripts may be e-mailed and the consulting
fees paid by credit card via PAYPAL. There is an extra
charge of $15.00 for this service. |
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| The steps to pay via PayPal
are simple: |
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Log on to PAYPAL (using the button below) and make payment arrangements
using their system. Add the $15.00 surcharge to the price
of the analysis service chosen. |
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E-mail the script as an attachment
in Final Draft, Microsoft Word, or RTF text. |
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Confirmation of the arrival of your
script and payment will be e-mailed to you immediately
upon receipt. |
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One Final Piece Of Advice
Whether we work together or not, please, be absolutely, positively
sure your screenplay is ready before you shop it. You only get
one chance - period. Get as much feedback as you can first -
and NOT from your friends, even the ones in the business. No
matter how objective they say they are, they are either giving
you the benefit of the doubt, or lying. This isn't to say that
your script might not be absolutely great as is, but because
you can't trust them to tell you if it's not, you need
to run it past someone who first of all knows how to read a
screenplay - it is a deceptively difficult skill - and who doesn't
know you at all.
I look forward to working with you.
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| Literary consultant Lisa
Cron provides comprehensive script and story
analysis, in-depth story development solutions and
consulting, for both the professional and the novice. |
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| There are numerous common problems that can instantly derail an otherwise good screenplay. Here is an in-depth look at several of the most frequent problems, with tips on how to avoid them.
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"To get it right, be
born with luck or else make it. Never give
up. Get the knack of getting people to help
you and also pitch in yourself. A little money
helps, but what really gets it right is to
never--I repeat--never under any conditions
face the facts. "
-- Ruth Gordon
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"Imagination is more
important than knowledge. Knowledge is limited.
Imagination encircles the world. "
-- Albert Einstein
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"I believe more in the
scissors than I do in the pencil."
-- Truman Capote
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"When in doubt, have
a man come through the door with a gun in
his hand."
-- Raymond Chandler
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"I read part of it all
the way through."
-- Samuel Goldwyn
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"Dear Editor, Why do
you keep sending my stories back? You're supposed
to print them and make me rich and famous.
What is it with you????"
-- Snoopy
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| Looking for answers to the most important questions asked by screenwriters today? |
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| Lisa Cron, along with other top studio and television executives, literary agents, managers, script consultants, producers, produced screenwriters and distinguished screenwriting authors, answers screenwriters' questions in Final Draft's new book, |
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